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Good potential but could be formated better

If this is the first page of the series,  then you should create a portal page that summaizes the premis and gives navigatable links to other articles. Save the nation profile for a seperate page, that is your page for the actual Socialist America for another page..

The worst thing about your point of divergence to me is its length, kept it short and to the point. Your idea about Trosky influencing the U.S unemployed is a good starting point but can be more conciesly explained in a series of points. Go from- 1.cause, to effect, 2. explanation for why the POD is important and an 3. opening for what your timeline will be look.

For an example of what a good portal page looks lie I reccomend you take a look here and here.

Look, this stuff isnt the most obvious or easy, but its worth doing when sharing your ideas. I know from experience they will get more attenton and you will be taken more seriosuly. No matter the content, the presentation of the page. and the mechanics of the writing is key

Good luck, and do keep writing,

Stepintime (talk) 01:05, July 19, 2017 (UTC)

I'm somewhat confused about what you mean. Should I have written the article in the third person (as if we were observing it from our timeline), or is it ok to write it in the first person (as if we lived in this timeline)? (JMC Red Dwarf (talk) 04:27, July 19, 2017 (UTC))

Oh, now I get it. The portal page is in the third person, and the following articles are written in the first person. Now all I need is to give it a name, which is going to be difficult, since both Communist America and Socialist America, as you can see, are both taken. (JMC Red Dwarf (talk) 02:36, July 20, 2017 (UTC))

Wait, there's a problem. I put this page and the others like it in the category of "Communist America", and I'd have to remove that. But I don't know how to remove categories from a page. (JMC Red Dwarf (talk) 05:56, July 20, 2017 (UTC))

I was going to give you a larger response, but your idea is correct.

I wrote to you about categories on your talk page,

It seems you have come up with a title to best suit your timeline,

If you are still looking for a title I suggest  "From Sea to Shining Sea" as a timleine about an second American Revolution, I tend to like titles that more of a storyish feel to them then just describing the subject, but that's just my taste.

Stepintime (talk) 17:16, July 26, 2017 (UTC)

timeline name

I'm not sure where to put this note, so I'll just put it here. The name of this country's timeline (and of related pages) is a "palceholder" and will be changed in the future. (JMC Red Dwarf (talk) 01:06, July 24, 2017 (UTC))

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